I will have to agree with sketchroll.
I would suggest that the job a resume needs to do, it is to convey the most important information as quickly as possible. Hence hierarchy is key.
It seems to me a bit as if you are trying to shoe-horn information into a resume that it isn’t really suited for. It is a bit coverletter with personal statements about you working in retail as well as portfolio with work samples.
In my opinion, the resume should be a document that states the facts, nuts and bolts of your qualifications, professional experience and education.
In the coverletter, you can elaborate on with an analysis of these hard facts and how they are important in relation to you as a designer as well as a person.
The portfolio will be the place to show your work and put everything into context.
After all, you will submit all these three documents anyway when you are applying for a job.
In terms of the resume you have up now, there are a few things that jumped out at me.
Besides the already mentioned kerning and spacing issues (which to a designers eye are hard to overlook), I would also take another pass at the info you are including.
Don’t feel like you have to add text just for the sake of adding text and making your resume appear fuller.
What is relevant or not is of course debatable but I wouldn’t for example include that you are currently participating in a competition. What makes this participation special? Did you get selected to send in a proposal? Are you one of the finalists? If this is a special honor, you should let the reader know.
In the same section, you are stating that your work has been exhibited “in a gallery”, which is great. However, let us know what gallery and where as well, which will give it a lot more weight.
If it was your grandmother’s garage. which people will assume without name and place, take it off the resume.
The style is not my cup of tea and does appear a bit out of date, but that is really something only you can decide for yourself.
The font and the colors are yours to choose as a truthful representation of your aesthetic and you should really go with what you find attractive. Copying somebody’s minimalist style, if it isn’t yours, is not a good idea, even if people might push you there.
To summarize, I would recommend to be clear about the purpose of your resume, have the reader in mind and try to find a way to convey the most important facts as quickly and efficient as possible.