Solid stuff man! It’s fun to see the progress from the initial portfolio back in 2011. The Striker Pro is super clean and a great looking headseat, I have a few friends in the office who have scooped it up and have nothing but good feedback.
Below is some basic feedback based on your PDF:
I would like to personally see a bit more hierarchy in the sketches (some really rough thumbnails —> Renders) and some loose concepts without any color or value… just basic lineart.
The projects seem to be a bit scattered, Perhaps group them by brand or year of release?
I know professional it is difficult to show full process, but I think one of the projects at Sound United would benefit from showing a bit more. If anything just “Who” you are designing for and what some of the CTQs are you are trying to accomplish. (i,e The Striker Pro is designed for “The avid gamer” who needs a sleek, stylish high end headset that immerses his in the game).
It may only be personal preference, but I tend to stay away from any first person text.