Hi Pritchre,
For me, your online pdf took a while to load - try resizing the file for a quicker loading time.
On first look, I quite like the ‘punch’ and impact of your layout, graphic and use of full page images throughout… however i would pull it back a little. Don’t be scared of white space.
I’d also look where you could ‘trim the fat’ on the number of pages and text. Do you need an contents page of a portfolio of 3 projects?
The ‘Harmony’ project could do with tightening and reducing the number of pages, some of which could be combine. 21 pages on 1 project is too much.
Your last project for me is the strongest. It is simply told and I can tell every pages purpose. What I am missing in your portfolio is some prototyping or sketch models and this project would be perfect for it. Even just a nice picture of a range of different card models you tested to furthered your thinking and final design, it needn’t be fancy.
Good start! I look forward to an update