I’d like to see a lot more process and a lot less presentation. I’d like to see 2-3 pages of 10 concept iterations, a few down elected designs nicely sketched up, at least one full scale mockup with a few shots of kids playing with it, then a refined final design. The animation and presentation is the gravy that goes on the turkey… but you can’t have a meal with just gravy… focus on the turkey first.